I was scrolling through my past excerpts and realized that you don’t know how The CyberWorld ACTUALLY starts. I did post the first few sentences of the first chapter, but I like to include a prologue, which I usually write halfway/at the end of the book, when I know what’s happening. So this excerpt is unedited (from my very first draft!!) and I’d love to hear your feedback. 😀
It was dark and quiet in Wing 22A. The whizz and whirr of computers and the streak of light flooding from the room nearest the long hallway were the only sounds that could be heard. Everything else was dark and dimly lit, making the walls blacker than they usually seemed. Not that it made such a big difference. The walls were usually a factory-shined gray and the hallway’s walls were probably just as smooth. A rustle of noise could be heard, and the slightly ajar door filled with light was pushed silently open; A man stepped out and the lights of the empty, new hallway flickered on.
He walked down the short corridor, his shiny black leather shoes clacking firmly on the hard ground. “Breeze?” the man spoke the name written on the sheet; there was no last name.
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Well… what did you guys think *chews nails nervously* Not much creative punctuation this time, I guess! Yay!
This is sort of like a prologue, but I hope it’ll be interesting enough to draw readers in. My description of the world, which is the beginning of my first chapter, was probably much more compelling, but, well, the opening lines are what they are, I guess.
This week I read Gracefully Grayson (ARC courtesy of Disney Hyperion), and OHMYGOSH I can’t wait for you guys to read it when it comes out in November (!!). It was SO. SAD. It’s only 250 pages, but IT WAS AMAZING. Ami Polonsky seriously needs to write more novels. Like, a LOT more. This book gave me the serious feels. I’ll probably be reviewing it in October, as per publisher request, so you’ll have to wait to hear my thoughts 😦
I’m also trying out Wattpad for the first time; it seems like an awesome book reading service, and I’m hoping to post some of my short-stories-in-need-of-critique there!
My life has been pretty boring, other than lots and lots of homework, occasional reading, and the very rare writing time.